All Comments on 'The Skiing Trip'

Do hope there is another chapter soon.

Mmm, Can I be your sister? ;)

Garbage!

Especially for a first time writer, that was pretty damn good in my opinion. Nothing revolutionary, but a solid plot, well told. Considering the comment the sister made at dinner, I might have thought things might have progressed a little further the same night, but I'll look forward to that in the next chapter.

Total rubbish try wanking not writing as if your has good at that has this storiey is you will never cum

pity it was spoiled by enormous 9 inch penis , why are the men in these stories oversized freaks of nature ?

Ignore the nay Sayers and plz finish the stories. And ask the ANONS what stories they have written. Crystalbrn

this by a different any moose

Well written and believable. Nice to read a story with a coherent plot and one which aims beyond the formulaic and farcical stories that clutter this site.

I should think that he may be able to bribe his sister into giving him another blow job by telling her that he would go down on her first, since she doesn't get that from her boy friend.

There's a lot of possibilities this story could take, but I hope that Paul and Jo become a lot more than just siblings.

Thanks for the read

Thanks for comments. Please keep them relevant and constructive. I don't mind negative posts but I would like them to indicate why the story was not enjoyed rather than just dumping on it.

Background; this is loosely based on true events and there is more to the story if it prooves popular enough. However each chapter should be enough of a story in its own right so noone is felt like they are left hanging.

I thoroughly enjoyed the tale and it is very well written. I can just imagine myself in the bedroom in your place. The fact that you chose to ask for a blowjob instead of offer to pleasure her makes me think that this story may be real. Good Job.

I liked your tale it has definite potential please finish it the only issue is minor spelling errors but it was good enough that the errors were not really noticed

Take no notice of the naysayers. Focus on the positive comments. The story has lots of possibilities and I liked the way you set the scene between the characters and how you developed the plot.

It has lots of potential for development so keep writing. Look forward to the next Chapter.

Please continue this story. I enjoyed it and can't wait to see what happens next. Remember those that can't write are often very critical. Thanks for posting this story.

i really enjoyed it...please add to it...cant wait

no background on the relationship between the sibs. a bit unrealistic as to her being so willing to go skiing with her brother at the drop of a hat. if she has no money and no job why would the brother want her to go. needs rewriting and a good editor to fill in the plot holes. in the future before posting write the whole story out in rough form then take it one chapter at a time and edit it then post. this keeps the readers from haveing to wait so long for a new chapter, also if you run into a writers block it doesn't matter since nothing has been posted.

needs a total rewrite even for a british speaking writer it sucks way to many wrong words and missing words etc. get a GOOD EDITOR and do a rewrite before you post anything else.

please add a new story been waing

would really like to here the next part of the story

I hate it when someone writes a good story and then leaves us hanging

great story please continue

ended too quickly!

That was the best thing I have read on here for years. Please please continue....

Very good

Where's Chapter 2?