All Comments on 'The Slaving World Pt. 01'

So overall I enjoyed the chapter, I'd give it 3 out of 5 stars but the beginning turned me off at first. It was so boring the first like 2-3 pages, I know stories have to build but it just seemed like it went into details that were more like filler and were unnecessary. I nearly stopped reading because it was just mind numbing and I ended up skimming and skipping parts in those first few pages.

I know you did it in the Elaine series but one of the things you did every single chapter that wasn't needed was describe how the main character looked, usually it seemed like it was word for word and all you had to do was copy and paste the same describing paragraph each chapter posting. I'm just saying there's no need to describe the character every time you post or describe every single detail for little things. Overall good but it could've used two less pages.

You are a good writer. Too good.

Doggharn fuck, this story hurts. My brain feels swollen, there's a ringing in my ears and my heart is in agony, it feels fucking terrible. Don't worry, it's nothing new, it always happens while I read slavery-stories where females are the ones 'done in'. The sex was good though. Very good. Erotic overload. But Hunter still deserves the 'pain' he is in, more of it, just because he likes making anal a horrible experience up to the degree where it's debatable whether he knows how to do it correctly at all. Oh doG, you are a good writer, cause I am fuming. It's a pity your stories do not allow for revenge-fantasies 'on paper', as this specific one would have been a best-seller when it comes to that crotch-puss called Jake. What an idiot. His wifey would have been far more compliant after her experience with the Arse-bungler and wasn't he in dire straights when it came to filling her role as a staff-member on the farm? Stingy bastard. There are very few women out there who would acknowledge his existence if they knew what type of farm-work their marriage would entail. Hope he falls into a bayonet stomach first. If females aren't allowed to choose retribution in that specific universe, maybe the Failed Fudge-packer can do something about a man who would do something like that to another person. (The fraudulent slavery-papers? If he could do that to his wife, just imagine what he'd do to those he hardly knew. The way he did it, is even worse than copying her signature. I know the laws in our current universe deem otherwise, but I'd rather not have anybody hear what I think of 'justice'.). Not that I should bemoan her fate with such vigor, as she didn't have much by way of empathy for the slaves on the farm.

All in all you are an exceptional writer, outstanding being the better word and after finishing reading the other stories that you've written, I'd be quite proficient in the art of pegging the throwing-knives I've made so far.

Shot for story.!

How's the next chapter coming??

Can not Wit for the Next Chapter, great writing and characters

Some old characters, some new ... I expect this to be a wonderful sequel.

My apologies to all the decent toads in the world.