All Comments on 'The Song of Farwalker and Deadgirl'

...how this ended up in Erotic Couplings. That's two in a row that ended up here. I'd think it was rather more a fit for Loving Wives, Romance, Horror, or Non-Erotic. I originally submitted this to LW because there was what amounts to a broken "marriage" at the center of it.

I read your story on another site. There was no gratuitous violence. Nothing is clean or pretty about warfare. 5*

Another gem of a story, another five.

Another gem!

It's been a long time since I gave this a read for Todd, and had forgotten most of it.

Lit categories have gotten a little crazy!

You come up with the greatest story lines. 5*

Dick

Original, believable and compelling. You showed us a vignette of what life on this planet was like for the last million years or so. Brutal, harsh, opportunistic with one law: Only the strong survive. The world has been at war somewhere for my entire life and now we are once again living under a high probability of a nuclear exchange. Have we really come that far? 5*

I enjoyed the story very much. Great storyline, to be followed one day? Who knows?

Thank you . The characters really came alive.

Thanks for sharing a super story! *****

Oh, btw, I'm so glad some webmaster is protecting my delicate sensibilities from too much violence. What a crock!

I love all of Todd172's creations , but this one holds a special place for me .

No matter which category Lit sticks it in , it's simply superb storytelling . Too bad it wasn't in LW simply because fewer eyes will see it .

Compile your stuff and self-publish, if you haven't already. If you have, where can I get it?

By the way, I'd love to read the uncensored version of this. It reminds me of "Quest For Fire", (I always had a thing for Rae Dawn Chong!)

At any rate, once again, thanks for a great story. *****

oddly, the constraints of the language may have helped the starkness of the theme come through.

You could perhaps find (for commentator -1) an earlier version of this story on Some Other List.

Green-something.

Excellent read! 5 Stars. Hope you'll decide to continue their story. It would be fun to read of their travels, blooming love, some sex, and the making of a home of their own.

The original story is on SOL ( storiesonline.net ) .

Thanks, I haven't searched too far past Literotica - I don't even have time to read everything I want to read there - but I'll most assuredly find it!

Todd, your stories never disappoint! Thanks very much for letting this one out! ;-)

It's hard to find authors even in Mainstream Lit who understand that rhythm and cadence are imperative for "The Voice" to reach its readers.

You are a rare find who should express these stories in a very different venue.

One where your talents would be rewarded with more than Gold Stars and lack of response from those who shamelessly enjoy your efforts without any recognition whether stars or comments.

that you only started writing in June/16. Your talent is beyond belief. I have a feeling we'll be seeing you as a major novelist in years to come. 5*

I am blown away by your writing. Please accept my thanks for an amazing tale.

That was excellent...

-jaye-

How did I miss this one about ten weeks ago?? The whole story seems like one big song.

What an entertaining tale spun from the mind of an excellent storyteller.

Than you.

Talk about a gut reaction; this story had me going from tearing up to cheering. A simple tale, well told. It's impossible to resist cheering for a brave woman putting it all out there for her man.

Thank you for another great story. I think you did justice AND respect to the Ancient Ones and the Pueblo societies in your tale.

Every one I have read, leaves me wanting more.

Thank you!

Good story

Not in Louis lamour style but good

is mindless. Nevertheless, this is a far better piece of writing than the vast majority of what we see on Lit. The author is quite a talent, and his wife must be very special, too, to contribute as she does.

Very very good. With great interest but little knowledge of Anasazi and pueblo Indians I have read much about them. I believe you have written a fair assessment of two who could have been during the tumultuous times. Very enjoyable.

You succeeded, most admirably

CE? Really? CE? What is wrong with you?

Bloody interesting, I say and very well written. Bravo again Todd and Missus...!

FWIW. I ran across a thesis that speculated Mesoamericans, (Aztec, etc.) invaded and subjugated (and ate) the original people. Anazasi is a Navaho word, the original people are gone without a trace except for their Pueblos.

There are human remains (bones) showing the distinctive cut marks made by stone tools when an animal is butchered for meat. History of the Americas is around 23,000 years of one people subjugating or even exterminating the original inhabitants.

Great story. Thanks.

Fantastic story.thoroghly enjoyed it

A wonderful and hideous story of both good and bad cultures. Not much different then what we have today if you look around the world at various happenings. Hopefully the righteous and virtuous will lead the way to true civility among all people.

Two of the more warlike peoples among Alaska Natives are the Haida and the Tlingit. Up to 20% of their male population were ready to fight at a moment's notice. Clan Grandmothers were close to absolute monarchs. Matriarchy.

Excellent work. Thanks.

Wonderful. Thanks.