All Comments on 'The Song of Roland Ch. 13-14'

The story man...

Really good

This just keeps getting better and better. Thank you for sharing.

Starting to really feel for the two. I hope we don't have to wait too long to see where this goes.

The story is developing nicely, with some real emotions - Kelsea's guilt, realisation of what she has become, Roland's anger at her manipulation of him, his love for her that he won't admit to (yet). And as ever, some great erotic scenes that never get boring. Overall, a brilliant mix of fantasy setting and real emotions...very good story-telling!!

The side we get to see of Kelsea in these chapters is amazing. I've rarely been treated to such an incredibly well delivered emotional break down before, it was so genuinely human. Many have created strokes with conflicted antiheroes wrestling with their feelings, but few manage to create a character so perfectly as you have with Kelsea. I felt I was experiencing the exact same emotional process as Roland when he confronts her, up until now I didn't fully 'get it' as to why he was still allowing this to move along, now I see the deeper layer.

I can't wait for more, please keep it up!

Roland gets drugged and force fucked (not that it wasn't hot) -> Kelsea reads him the riot act

Kelsea cheats with two others in front of him -> Roland needs to comfort her, no real lasting animosity on his part

I dunno...maybe it's just in character for them, but it left a sour taste in my mouth.

Really though good job on the writing, the story so far and by now has me genuinely caring for the characters and what they go through. Good portrayal of the harpy as a raw, violent, and overpowering beast. Also more backstory for Roland, which is nice.

10/10 would read again, although maybe not because of the feels hurting.

Whenever I see a comment that says "I came to fap, not to feel," It is always aa succubus story. Keep up the good work.

I greatly feared that our main hero was developing into an emotional teenager... Sometimes less internal dialogue allows for a cleaner story. Let the reader figure out his state of mind through his actions.

— The RedbarreN

The internal monologue was very needed there, turned this into the chapter with the most emotional depth so far

She never apologized for abusing him, physically and mentally after he was raped.

It took awhile to get through this chapter. I don't get off on rape, abuse, and manipulation, but to each his/her own I guess.