All Comments on 'The Sounds of Sex'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Great story idea, too sterile. Where's the beef?

This could have been quite erotic had you developed it a bit more and used more descriptive language. Many of the terms made it sound like it was written for a "How to" text book or sex education guide..."digital manipulation" and "cunnilingus" for example. Try it again.

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