by mspat
You've out done yourself with this one!!! I thought I was in love before, I don't even know what to call this feeling.
You have written a great series to this point!!! I hate when authors write in CLIFF HANGERS IN TO A STORY LIKE YOU DID WITH THIS ONE!!!! I hope the next chapter will be out in the next week or so PLEASE!!!! I hate to wait long for what happens next in the story
I do agree did feel a little rushed and unorganized, but entertaining none the less. Patiently waiting for the next part. :-)
Seriously, that girl needs to get some comeuppance, her and Martin both. I really hope this isn't the last part.
5 Huge Stars, btw! Great stuff. :)
I so want Katrina to be beyond humiliated!! That Martin asshole needs be beaten about the head by Sarah!! SO good mspat!!
However...
In the first two chapters, Katrina states that she knows Ashton would not become attracted to and it's implied that he never was attracted to Chevonne. But in this chapter Ashton says that Katrina was told that he was originally attracted to Chevonne first. That's just a little piece in the story that was confusing.
Overall this story is really cute and I can't wait for the next chapter to see how it goes. Great story!
I also think the story is a bit rushed and has many contradictions. One instance is the parent's three bedroom house. This is a wealthy family whose property has a front gate, a guest house, a limo/multiple vehicles and servants but the main house only has a master, guest room and Ashton's 'old room'? Ashton had to sleep on the couch and his brother did not have an 'old room'.
I cannot imagine how difficult it is to create a story from start to finish. While not an Ivy-League scholar or anything, I am pretty decent with spelling and grammar. I would be more than happy to help you edit this story and any future installments.
You have a great talent for writing and this chapter had me loving your writing even more. Please continue writing this story!!!! I love this story :)
Are you gonna finish Zachary and Ciara?? That could be a good story. Its a shame you just left it.
I loved the story. Couldn't stop reading. Could you please finish Zachary and Ciarra??? I come looking for the next chapter everyday.
Seems like one more chapter is in order. Also what about Zachary and Ciara?
Hanging on!!!
You mean to tell me this guy liked chevonne at first, chickened out to talk to her then dates and haves sex with her roommate a door or so away and then engaged in racist comments and jokes about cheveonne with Katrina then magically grew a conscious and decided " not to do it anymore" and she's now marrying this wimp piece of crap for a guy.....(sigh) is the guy a racist? No but he has no strong feeling about the morality of a racist or he would not have been able to do or say the things he's said. Her bringing up how she was, around her friends only showed, once again her lowering herself so he would not feel to bad about his actions, doesent mean she was not wrong though.
Then what female agrees to marry a guy when he's already in a relationship ( a skank) but the book does not portray chevonne as one so it was out of character. Chevonne is a sad and pathetic character, i mean really.
And finally what mom and/or father would be ok with her daughter marrying some guy under those circumstances, one who thinks her daughter is not going to be able to do any better, or one who has dollar signs for eyes. Its not a romance story to me its a tragedy. I mean she doesn't even want him alone with Katrina to break up, yet your marrying him, this will be the man your son and.daughter will be looking to for guidance morally and logically and you don't even trust him.
Its my fault I called this story out in the last part, even said I was not going to read anymore and here I am reading it and getting pissed.
All in all not my type of story
I prefer my hero to be strong.
I really enjoyed reading this story. It had me cracking up...the mom Alice is a hoot. But I know there is more to this story. Plus I am awaiting for you to finish Zachary & Ciara's story too. I have saved you to my favorites so I can check back to see if you have updated.
There is no appeal to this guy at all. Wimpy & racist. He didn't even stand up to the reporter. This is a bizarre story.