by creative1772
Hot story. You handle the girl's switch from sub to domme well - she's in command but uncertain at times. Her pauses for reassurance felt very realistic. I suggest using a consistent verb tense throughout. In the final two paragraphs, you switch from past to present, and it is jarring. Otherwise, an excellent story.
I have seen this ass wipe talking trash on just this type of story. They made a comment that the dominatrix belonged "face down in a gutter" and more (some encouraging violence). Why read this type of story if it's not your thing? I liked it and would like to see more.