All Comments on 'The Surprised Attraction Ch. 01'

more please - sister and mother story .... :)

Please continue

Please continue.

You welcome feedback to determine "if" you should continue? Are you kidding? You dare not stop now. You wrote a great story, you had a good plot, you spelled words correctly, and you had hot sex. With the implication that Leah would be involved later. There should be no "if". You're getting good reviews only a couple hours after release. You really need to continue. "If". Ha! More like "need".

A delightful story. please do more.

Lets get mom involved too

Well written and very interesting. It has the potential to be a long series. Let's see where you take it!

please continue! excellent story!!

Loved the story so far. Hope to see many more intriguing chapters.

Great start! Can't wait for the next chapter. Hoping Sam finds out how kinky Kelly really is and he's not the only one hiding lustful thoughts for Leah

it was disjointed, non sequential, and hard to follow. Why introduce all those elements and then leave them sitting idle?

nothing really happened. the women in the story control those around them by denying access to what even they want. but if they willingly participated they would have to actually be part of the relationship.

secrets, control, manipulation.

not my cup of tea

Love it so far! Hopefully the gf will convience her sis, please continue.

Beautiful

now sister Leah needs to be brought into the Picture and since Mom is a MILF. He should maybe do the whole family.

...from the atrocious writing "skills" exhibited, the whole thing was appallingly overwritten as well. Things that could have better been expressed in half a line instead dragged on for half a page.

Fail.

I appreciate the amount of work you have put into this story. Please continue, but you should seek help from one of the editors.

I'm looking forward to the next part. I can hardly wait for Leah and Kelly to get together with Sam. I agree with some of the comments that their mom should also have her way with Sam.

Whilst the story is good the spelling, punctuation and grammar need serious attention

Sorry. Everything was going fine until they started talking about the well-done steak. I couldn’t go any further.

Seriously well-done? "Hurr durr well done steak? I like him already" Way to force in your own wrong opinion

Wtf is wrong with you?

How does someone not meet somebody's parents in 2 years and I love the people that have the most negative comments never have the nerve to actually use their name maybe if you guys gave your name you could help the person fix their story

Warning. There is no ending. It just stopped being written on a cliffhanger. If that frustrates you, stop now.