by millennium_bard
Very cool story! I look forward to the rest.
I wait for each installment of your stories. I enjoy them very much. Pleaase keep them coming. JD seller
THIS IS THE EXACT SAME STORY AS CHAPTER 6. I WAITED 4 MONTHS FOR THIS?!? WAY TO DROP THE BALL ON THIS ONE
I NEED MOREEEEEEEEEE
GIVE ME MOREEEEEEEEE
More seriously, I'd love to hear soem more, and not to mention a bit more violence, but that's just me.
Where is Chapter 8 thru 100? This is a very good series but the Chapters are few and far between. I need more, more MORE!
This is a great story, but there are only two problems with it. Unlike your David and Lyssa story this one is hella shorter in chapter length and its been forever since it was updated. Other than that this is going amazing but I hope that the next one comes out soon and I hope that it is a little longer.
A well written story. I hope to be able to read the next chapter soon. Hate waiting! good story telling technique. But please keep an eye on the spelling as it can jerk a person from the story.
HEY, ALL YOU DUMBASSES OUT THERE LEAVING COMMENTS...IF YOU LIKE READING THE STORIES SO MUCH, HOW COME YOU BLIND BASTARDS HAVE'NT FIGURED OUT THAT CHAPTER 6 AND 7 IS THE SAME STORY. IDIOTS!!!!!
this is a really great story. Its a really shame that it hasnt been finished.
And to the person below me who is so brave they remaind anonymous(?), chapter 7 is definitily diffrent from chapter 6. Maybe you should learn how to click on the right page?
very good story line. remind's me of piers anthony's work
with out as many twist's
Good premise, a great outline, as a story it flows well but... it could be fleshed out a lot more. I had a small problem with the one line paragraphs, things could have been so much better as well as longer. It takes time to write as well as get a coherient product that doesnt just ramble. This is the first story I have read of your and will read more. I hope you will have time(hell we are all busy) to put a little more into it. I do want to thank you for your effort and your time that you so graciously share with us.
Thanks again
george
the story was good and short the changelings its wat i imagine the us to be like after obamas stint in the white house
it is absoulutly amazing tho it would be cool if he turned into a changling like cindy so he could have the instincts and the power of one but keep his intelgence.
That would just be mean, no more wife after that if he did change. It would be to easy for him to infect her and probably kill her. Feel sorry for that Cindy kid, if see stays alive it's going to be a pretty lonely life for her.
After enjoying the previous 6 chapters of this story, forgetting the spelling errors & missed words I am afraid that everything was completely wasted at the end. I am sorry but you could of made much more of an effort with killing the General & the destruction of the B 52, then how about a reunion between Philips, Cindy & the rest of the resistance. Any chance maybe of an improvement? The first chapters were great & getting better as they went along, you just don't want to spoil the overall story with this ending?