All Comments on 'The Table That Turns Pt. 01'

1,000 stories just like this out there. Think I'll go watch some bj porn.

There is nothing wrong with writing your version.. There are people who love thus story of one man overpowering another..anyone complaining about the story has themselves to blame because it is stated in the beginning that this isn't a unique tale. I just think it is rushed. It shouldn't be within a few hours that this "straight" married man is reduced to a cocksucker and no longer the boss..

Your chapters are toooooooo short. Not technically, but practically. Gay stories in general are shorter than other genres, but even so, you need to have 3-5000 words. Short chapters, especially initial ones, do not provide enough character development. Matthew's mom was too domineering, he was picked on in school, etc. Just having a submissive personality usually isn't enough. But, if you are going to go that way, give examples of how he lost his girlfriend(s) to someone more dominant, the way Matthew lost his wife in this series.

Good writing, good flow, etc. Just more, make it longer and etc.

and I know what he means when realizes with his first kiss of the cock he is hooked.

4yourpleasureiam

Thanks for writing a great story! As someone pointed out, it is a common theme where a younger man dominates an older successful man and takes over his life but no harm in each author writing their version. I have also written my version after reading your great story. I hope you enjoy my story, Best Foot Forward.