All Comments on 'The Three Day Pass Ch. 30'

Great story. Right out of the headlines or are you predicting the future.

I started reading this from chapter one. You know I was attracted to the story because of my name (Joanne). I made a few jokes with you about it, but, was only kidding you. The story and writing are "class a" my friend. I feel the story is about to end and I for one shall miss it. Hugggs to you.

While I enjoy the story, I do have some constructive criticism. The word is "sordid" not "sorted". Contractions are your friend in writing American characters' dialogue, e.g. "It's" rather than "It is"; "I'm" rather than "I am". Failure to use contractions makes your characters sound like they are gangsters lifted from "Guys and Dolls."

Thank you for your comments. For most part you were right. However, contractions are difficult for non-English speaking persons to understand and use. When you speak to them and when they speak to you, it is better not to use them. Your other point is well taken and thank you again. I am sorry that you did not like the story, but you can't please everyone.

I like story. true to life

fantabulous

We do tend to shoot ourseldves in the foot, do we not?