All Comments on 'The Ties That Bind Ch. 2'

Ch. 1 was enticing and reasonably well-written, although there was not enough background about either character. In this chapter, the story remains interesting but the quality of the writing falls off sharply. There are many inconsistencies. When did he gag her? When did he undress? There are far too many misplaced and overused commas, as well as many sentence fragments with no verbs. Your storytelling and your style are good, but you need a good editor!