All Comments on 'The Torpentrian Slave Ch. 01'

For a first effort, this was amazing! A suggestion: her flashback was perhaps a bit too drawn out. Maybe some of it could have been withheld until later. She seemed much braver & adventurous in her flashback, much more timid & fearful now. It felt like you were writing about two different people. As a reader, I want to know why.

I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

Well done, as the other commentator wrote, for a first story this was very well done. Hope the subsequent chapters will be posted asap.