All Comments on 'The Trap'

5*. Just in case. ;)

Very nice, sort of a fitting hell.

I don't dare give this one a low score :)

This reminds me of your story 'The Reaper' which I liked also. The demon telling Zoey 'I'm just doing my job' cracked me up. Let's face it demons are just the public service of hell after all. Have never read a story before that was about internet trolls so once again you get top marks for originality. You're one hell of an interesting writer so keep them coming. I'm a big fan.

i am both incredibly aroused and slightly terrified

From a writer's perspective, I love how you tied in the main character's thoughts as in first-person yet kept his fiancée as the leading character through both journalistic style and disconnected flashbacks, leaving us to assume what she did or did not say. The ending was a massive success, the note lending some evidence to her insanity yet also giving truth. Not to mention the skill with which you tied in a relevant topic of cyberbullying delivered an effective message, albeit the erotic foreground and religious comedy ("I'm just doing my job" honestly had me laughing like an idiot for maybe three minutes). Your character's responses to his fiancée were flawless, passing through the seven stages of grief perfectly. It must have taken some serious character involvement to achieve that, so congratulations. Looking forward to reading more

~Ink

5-ed... just in case.

Should i dare to give a low rate ? Although how bad i want so because of curiosity i wont. :) An awesome fiction. I'd love to see a possible continue of the story :)