All Comments on 'The Tree House'

Good original story and well written; maybe you could write a sequel to this story?

It's hard to find a fresh plot but it was definitely a pussy wetter

Very erotic in description, and the fact that their experience was spontaneous, and unplanned, resulting in pure lovemaking with no thought to contraception adds very to the turn on very much. For she has just taken his sperm in her unprotected pussy, with neither thinking about the risk of pregnancy they just took.

I hope you write sequels to this loving incestuous couple. You could follow up with more sessions whenever they do see each other in the future; including one where he comes home to attend his sister's wedding in the future, and a taboo lustfilled session between them a few days before her wedding results in her becoming pregnant with her first child. And her husband would be just oblivious to the true paternity of that child as he would be of the other children he would raise, thinking they were his, but were actually fathered by his wife's brother.

A common remark that would be made about that married couple, the husband also being one to make it, was how all their children looked like their mother; with only she and her brother knowing those children did actually look like their true father also.

...please get someone to check your spelling. It's very distracting when you see a real word and then realise that it's the wrong one in the context of the sentence.

I'd rate it higher if you ran it through an editor first.

Impressive, I enjoyed it. I wholeheartedly agree with you finding an editor to really finalize it: the grammar/puncuation were the only things I noticed. Your plot was sound, the characters and dialogue were believable, all in all, a good story.

I wanted to thank everyone who posted, rated, or read my story. I am sending this story to an editor to fix any mistakes. The edited version will then be posted.

Thank you again,

~K

One last thing. If you post, or e-mail me, please leave me a way to contact you. This way I can get better detail on ways to improve my stories, and thank you for showing intreast.

Be safe,

~K

...and I don't know that you need to go to the extreme of getting it edited and re-posted. It was readable as it was, but a couple of the commenters were just making a point that's frequently made on Lit--even if you do use SpellCheck (which writers who are at all uncertain about their spelling--nothing to be ashamed of--certainly should do!), it still won't catch the kind of error in which a correctly-spelled (and perhaps even correct-sounding) word doesn't fit the use to which it's put.

Examples here included "privet school," where "private school" was intended (a "privet" is an ornamental garden shrub used in a hedge), "your" (possessive, meaning it belongs to you) where "you're" (contraction of "you are") was meant, and the like. I noted three or four similar errors--not so many that they interfered with the enjoyment of a hot story--but just enough that some of your readers thought they were worth drawing to your attention.

Believe me, nobody would bother pointing them out to you at all if they thought your story wasn't worth the bother, or if they thought you were such a poor writer that you wouldn't care. YOUR story was worth the effort, and YOU'RE indeed a talented writer!

This was so enjoyable - thank you, K.

Editing is easy on most computer, and does make such a difference.

So - more, even better, please.

Lukas

Enjoyed the story, and I hope you are going to continue with the plot.

Don't lead us to belive that it is over with them. Everyone loves a happy ending to a good story.Do not woory about the spelling, punctuation, etc. You are not competing for an Emmy, you are just writing a story for our enjoyment. Keep the story going.

good story if they really love each other then when she gets her car they should pack and run away together and at the end of the first day together call thier parents and tell them they will only come home if they will not be seperated ever keep up the good writing

i loved it, hope we'll get part2 or something :D

cant believe the storyline was great and the plot wasnt driven perfect pace 10 / 10

just need a bit of work on the grammar and spelling.

half a story (and this was less than half) is worse than no story at all either finish what you started, find someone that will or delete all stories. stop wasting our time and the sites space on unfinished stories.