The True Master Ch. 01

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Not knowing what else to do I started going through the file structure opening any of the documents I could read, everything from configuration files to semi populated SQL databases. All of it was horribly confusing and as I worked through it a I kept a running tab of notes next to me trying to link every part of the program together and figure out what the different names and call signs for everything meant.

I quickly lost track of the time as I worked through everything, this happened when I worked on a problem. I usually had more references to go off then what this thing was giving me but I was slowly starting to make sense of everything.

Leaning back in my seat I looked up to see Kate sitting in the chair across from me looking bored. I glanced down at the clock, I had been at this for close to four hours already without stopping.

"Uh, Kate when did you put clothes on?" I asked. She was back in the sweatpants sweatshirt combo I had given her yesterday.

"I didn't think you would mind, I put them on while I was cleaning." She said.

I looked around surprised, my apartment was cleaner. The shoes that were usually in a mess by the door were lines up and clean. I turned around to look in the kitchen the dishes were gone from the sink and it looked as if the floor had been mopped something I had only done once or twice. The apartment hadn't been a sty but neither had it been clean. Now it was sparkling as much as a poorly maintained apartment built in the 80's could.

"You didn't have to do that." I said looking around.

"I wanted to feel useful Master." She said.

"Useful?" I asked.

She nodded. "You're working on a way to fix me, and I can't help with that so I figured I'd help you with everything else. Was I not supposed to do that Master? Did I move something out of place!" her voice was going shrill and she was very quickly working herself up.

"No! Its fine Kate, it's great!" I said stopping her. She calmed back down the frantic look at the thought of doing something wrong quickly fading away.

"I need to do something Master, you're the one working for me! It's supposed to be the other way around." She said.

"Other way around?" I asked confused about what exactly she meant.

"I'm the slave! I should be working while you relax! You shouldn't have a care in the world! I should be letting you use me! So far you've been so nice and everything, you won't let yourself be a Master! If you need a break order me to give you a blowjob or for me to be a footrest or something!" she said.

I looked over at her, she was breathing hard and her face was quickly turning red.

"A footrest?" I asked holding back a laugh.

She shrugged, "I don't know. It was the first thing that popped into my head." She said.

I nodded. "Perfectly reasonable."

The blush deepened on her face.

"Well come on then." I said pointing at my legs.

Kate looked at me and then down at my legs before she jerked out of the chair and onto the floor. She quickly made her way to my feet and raising them she slid underneath.

For a moment the two of us remained like that, her staring at the floor and me at her with my feet resting on her back. She shivered and bit her lip.

"This is arousing?" I asked.

Kate nodded "Your order's holding it back though." She said.

"Right, well get up this is ridiculous." I said.

Kate quickly got to her feet and stood up in front of me.

"Come here" I said opening my arms.

Kate hesitated and then sank down into my lap and I hugged her to me. Kate suddenly burst into tears and for a moment I feared had gone too far and broken her trust.

"Kate?" I said hesitating.

"Master, you're too nice." She said. Moving in my arms and bending in a way that only a gymnast could she turned around to face me. I looked at her face and placed a small kiss on her cheek.

"Kate, I'm trying to help the woman inside of you. I want you to go back to what you were before. I might have already taken advantage of you but I'm hoping you can see past that latter. I don't want to humiliate you, and to tell you the truth I'm just happy to have you here." I said. I tightened the hug a little drawing her closer to me.

"A slave for you?" asked Kate.

"No, a person. I'm a loner anti-social or whatever you want to call it. Never had many friends and never really wanted any, I always seem to do something wrong or miss something. I've ruined or just drifted out of any relationship I've ever had." I said.

Kate looked frowned.

"But you're so nice Master." She said.

"I think your perspective is a little biased." I said smiling. "I interact with stranger's fine, I love to walk the city by myself. Its part of the reason I work with computers, they are easy to understand. Maybe that's why it's working with you." I tapped her head. "Your half computer right now." I said.

Kate giggled and rested her head on my shoulder. "Maybe, but I'm still happy your my Master." She said.

I nodded as well and the two of us closed our eyes.

Then the door to my apartment exploded inwards.

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RuckinLguardRuckinLguardover 1 year ago

Great story, horrible punctuation. Someone needs to teach the author how to use a comma.

yannnnnyannnnnover 6 years ago
Great series

This series is just GREAT. Thanks!

PornGoddess2PornGoddess2about 8 years ago
Sorry to be picky, but...

"I RESEND the order" means "I give {transmit} it again".

The word you were looking for would be "rescind"

"Dew knot trussed spill chick two ketch awl airers."

RavedThradRavedThradalmost 9 years ago
First time for everything

I've never really liked Mind Control stories; the ones I've tried to read have tended to play out as wish fulfillment porn without plot. This one, however, has an interesting angle to the mind control aspect of the story, and it has a plot, too! I'm hooked!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Good story, even if it resembles something else.......but....

.....I just came across this, read part and went back to read 00, then forward again.

Man, I hope you find the courage to wreak havoc on your babies before you release them. Editorially, this kinda sucks.

Really, so far, these two are pretty rough.....In desparate need of polishing and cleaning in the technicals.

I like how you characterize and describe the environmental aspects of your story. Descriptions of his apartment, the changing of day to night as we works away, how he gets so involved he misses her working and cleaning around him, the frequent texture added by the description of the bedsheets and what she does with them...the description of her skin...and, um other body parts as he caresses them. Very nice.

That all serves to make the story more realistic, more believable. You obviously worked at this.

Then you send it out full of silly, little, niggling, irritating mistakes in spelling, punctuation and grammar. Half done...half baked.

No, I'm not the grammar police. Just a reader that doesn't like working harder than necessary to get through a story meant to entertain.

Stumbling over stupid technical issues is the biggest buzz-kill there is, next to a complete crap story.

So, you're gifted, if not yet committed to working your pieces over until they shine like polished silver....

Most annoying in this episode:

resend --> rescind

quit --> quiet

then --> than

There were dozens of lesser issues...and these aren't individually catastrophic, but taken with all the other messy, grammatical, spelling, punctuation and logical errors they become very distracting. Too. Much. Work.

PLEASE, look into editorial help, but in the very least retread, rewrite and correct to a higher standard. Your worth it and your legacy should reflect your intent and values, rather than "just barely adequate".

Most really good writers have both long editorial/rewrite cycles and very good editorial help. They are usually very disciplined about the technical aspects and are far more brutal with themselves than the publishing houses....well, that's debatable, but often true.

There are volunteers here. That might be a good place to start....I'm just saying....

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
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That's what I'm thinking. But. I love this.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
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Is it just me, or is this story drawing heavily from Noble's Jonathan Creed?

Not that I mind. The premise is sexy as hell.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
I can't help but think of this as a nerd's ultimate wet dream.

Which is not to say that it's a bad thing since all fictional stories--especially the ones on this site--are based in fantasy.

It's intriguing to read about her reactions as though it were completely natural for her to view the guy as God's gift to women... as creepy and weird as that may seem. That's the interesting part.

I'm not too keen on the way the man views himself though. Like he was a hero / 'the one' for 'helping' this one stranger out. I think I'm mostly thrown off by how easily he accepts this entire situation.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
I agree

Great story line but the mistakes are distracting and pull you out of the world. Literotica has volunteer editors. I suggest you use one of them.

bobi199bobi199about 9 years ago
Spell Check won't help

I just wanted to say that spell check won't help in this case, because it only picks up on words that are spelled wrong. The author is using words that are spelled correctly, but don't make sense in context, and sound similar to the word he means. For example, Resend instead of Rescind or House instead of Hour, Small mistakes, but not ones picked up on by spell check.

Great story, by the way, and really looking forward to the next chapter.

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