All Comments on 'The True Master Ch. 04'

Continue the story please

Even though there wasn't a lot of sex in this chapter, it showed great development. I hope Marcus gets more dolls and becomes more controlling and dominating.

"Father it is under control, the police have backed off and the charges have disappeared." Said Kent.

The attribution has to be in the same sentence. Use a comma within quotes and the 'said' isn't capitalized.

And buy a few commas.

This sentence should be: "Father, it is under control. The police have backed off and the charges have disappeared," said Kent.

Your story composition is good, and in general you write well. You have a bit of trouble with word choice (to, too), (ch 1:rescind, resend)...

Spell checkers, unfortunately, can make that worse that it should be. It's not a great problem, but I tend to notice.

Definitely keep writing !!!

I just found this and am really enjoying it. Good plot, nice character development, great descriptions. The grammar needs a lot of work though. Run on sentences, missing commas, "their" instead of "there", "to" instead of "too," and much more. At one point you called Beth, Kate. I doubt you'll fix this now, but please use an editor moving forward. It's painful to read in some places. And the errors keep me from giving the chapters 5 star ratings.

Same as Boratus said. The chapters so far contain many spelling mistakes and while the story in itself is good that makes me enjoy it less.

You write very well for someone who learned English as a secondary language, it may be the most difficult language to learn. Keep it up and I know you will improve!