All Comments on 'The Tutor Ch. 05'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Good story

But is that really how you are going to end it?

ProfDavrosProfDavrosalmost 10 years ago
Unreal

While possible, this is also an unrealistic way to finish.

As she's going away to collage soon it would make more sense to let that be the mechanism. I just have trouble believing that she was feeling "too close" but still decided to have sex (a big departure from her moral code) then break the relationship off 1 min later.

If she came over knowing it was the last time, it's manipulative.

Also unrealistic to pull out before her orgasm, come and not finish her off another way. Certainly inconsistent with his earlier behaviour.

First intercourse should leave her feeling euphoric. No description of her reaction other than sweat and sticky makes her seem cardboard like.

All in all a fun story series which could do with polishing and lengthening in places.

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