All Comments on 'The United Nations Ch. 01'

If you've read this far thanks for giving my story a shot. Let me know how I can improve, any constructive advice would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

To continue, this first part was hot. Then i wager part two will be molten..

very hot story. Love it please keep going there are more women in that house to love yet.

I liked the build up and the writing structure, you definitely have a good flow and pace.

Even though the story is not really for me ("So don't expect me to ever have any romantic feelings for you. This is just sex. Hopefully really good sex." That is what killed it for me, I need real emotional content to make things work for me) still worth four stars.

I don't think Sam and Heather are the first two kids in the house to commit incest. I don't think Heather is the only sister with bisexual leanings.

I hope the story develops beyond who Sam bangs next and in what positions.

You have an exciting premise, and likable characters. I'm interested in where this will lead. Surprise us

That was amazing. I loved the characters and the sex scene was hot. I hope chapter two is posted really soon. Thanks!

"What the hell is Literotica, I thought as I saw the word show up in the search bar. Curious I hit enter and watched as a new page popped up.

Incest/Taboo Sex Stories Hub"

Really!? No, REALLY?! This always looks so lame when authors use literotica in stories, it's not even funny.

Like another commentor mentioned, the part where Heather flat out tells him that she will never develop romantic feelings for Sam was like ice water thrown in my face. Not only does it severely diminish the emotional aspect, it also doesn't particularly gel with Heather's persona. Unless this was merely a ploy to protect herself from her own feelings, this leaves her seeming rather shallow, cavalier, and even a bit callous. This wouldn't be an issue if it was one of the others (except for Carmen), but you described Heather as being particularly close to Sam, which is what makes her attitude confusing.

Otherwise, I really like the idea of an interracial family. I don't even mind that they aren't truly related. I especially like that the girls all have big asses. This is a sorely underrepresented fetish in erotica, which is very frustrating to me. It would be so hot for Heather to have a secret butt lust for her black sisters, just longing to bury her face in Carmen's bodacious booty.

On a final note, if you really want to improve your writing for this kind of harem scenario in particular, read "Party of Five" and "Just the Six of Us" on this site. It sucks that "Party of Five" was left unfinished, but both of these authors really knew how to write a harem story.

I loved this story as it felt surprisingly realistic. I can't wait for future chapters and I hope you continue to take it reasonably slow.

Keep it coming.

Good start but in full agreement with SWIM's comments regarding romance. Doesn't make any sense unless like he suggested it was just to protect herself.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Yeah, like previous commentors said Heather's plain rejection to romantic feelings is a giant no no. But understandable since no big brother wants his sister to have romantic feelings for him, right? (or he could just resist :P) and you wanted their coupling to be driven by pent up lust rather than love. But I sincerely hope you change the script for the future. And don't you dare pull a MantalCase on us OP (like his Just The Six of Us ending). Love the prigression. Carry on, bruv! :D

Please finish this

Are the stories mentioned (written by Heather) real???

If so, how can they be found???

Please keep writing this story I fell in love with it and created an account just to follow you and favorite this story

Not gonna lie, I kinda wanted him to get with Isabel as well

I disagree with previous comments. I think Heather's desire for a strictly sexual relationship is perfect. Loved this story.

Keep the story going!!

Holy s**t! Just please don't stop writing! This was easily top 10 stories here! Thanks a lot :D

I hate when someone wright a super awsome story and never finish it, Why???

Write moreeeee

One of the best stories on literotica. I really really hope you have not abandoned it. I would love to read more.

Omg I'm so horny after reading this.

You have to continue!

This was great! The only problem is that we don't have the rest of the chapters :)

Why can't an author write about a guy/girl who gets turned off after finding out his/her sister/girlfriend is bisexual. After all, he/she will eventually cheat on either one of them. Not

all guys get turned on with FF action. 2*