All Comments on 'The Vacation Ch. 01'

Mistake in editing? Still a hot story. Looking forward to Chapter 2 and more.

Can't wait for chapter two.

seems like I read this before is it a copy, a repost or did you steal it? no matter it wasn't worth reading and you need to do a better job proofreading or use a good editor or both. don't post any more stories until you have one that is worth reading and has been properly edited.

Same thought as the guy who commented if it was stolen once I read "Bella," almost like you missed one of the names while replacing them.

Regardless it was a good story.

Since Tyler's a college grad and obviously older than his step sisters, make him more mature and give him some chest hair. Imagine the girls' glee as they stroke the soft hair on his chest, kiss his pecs, and suck him off. Give him the complete older brother package -- chest hair, pubes, muscular frame and big cock!

This is definitely original work, Bella was another character from a different story that I let slip in there. Sincere apologies if this too closely resembles another author's work, that was certainly not my attention. I edit and proof read by own work, but clearly need to get better at that or rethink the approach. Always appreciate the feedback.

Very hot. Can't wait for the next chapter. I think he should fuck the younger one, Clara, first. Maybe send Dani to keep the parents occupied for a while.

Great story and well written. I only gave you a 4 because the story is too short and definitely not finished. Hope to see additional chapters very soon.

It was an ok story that went off the cliff when you called your main character by the wrong name. Proof read several times prior to publishing.