All Comments on 'The Visitor'

The science fiction elements of this story outweigh the sexy plot twists, but you have woven them together nicely. It is interesting to think maybe there are aliens among us leading double lives. Now you can write a sequel called, "CFNA" (Clothed Female Nude Alien) and do something with that idea.

Wow this was very developed (and freakin' long). Even if it was a mainstream story this was well developed. I can actually see a movie made from this (including the sex scenes). One issue I had was that some of the transitions between characters were sudden and occassionally catch a reader off-guard. Another was that the final revelation seemed a little too quick and the end a little too tidy. Other than that, this was really good and a series can be made from this (another scientist on the trail, other aliens want human experiences too, etc.).

Strange as it may seem, the only real "problem" I had with this story was that the writing is so good and the buildups and transitions so smooth, that when the first time "fuck" is said - it detracts from the story in my opinion. A bit of a rude shock that *I* think could have been handled more delicately to stay in character with the otherwise classy presentation.

That said, it is a longer, but very well-crafted story - well worth the time to read every word.

I *did* notice where the character names were wrong a few times. Notably, "Chuck" was used in place of "Dennis" two times that were evident to me.