All Comments on 'The Voyages of the Starship Harem Ch. 01'

There were a LOT of typos and even some grammar mistakes that really made it difficult to read in parts. Literotica.com has several volunteer editors who would be happy to help.

Thank you for this startup. Please continue this adventure. I will watch for it.

Looking forward to the next chapter!!!

This must be your first attempt. Assuming that first thing you need is a proof reader. You used the wrong word more than once, misspelled several words had sentences that made no sense.as well as used things like 'we are instead of we're. Think about how people talk we don't say we are going we say we;re going. As this story stands it wouldn't get any positive reviews. How did he end up on that ship, why and how did his supposed stowaway end up there or did she just magically appear. To be as strong and fast she would have to be from a 4 or 5 gee world and a normal would die there within minutes.

I almost quit reading this story but thought I should finish it to give you a fair shake. I couldn't even give you a one on the rating, sorry.

Interesting start looking forward to seeing the next chapter.

It would be great to see more your Master of Sins as well.

i can't believe i missed my past tense faux pas in the beginning. i get to into actually reading my story when going back over it that i miss things like that. i did have a beta lined up once before if i recalled, i gotta find her contact information again. but i'll be sure to concentrate more so this doesnt happen again

I like it.

Any change of continuing ?