All Comments on 'The Wager'

what happened with darrens wife?

excellent. hope the slut got knocked up.the tramp

How long will "Our(?) protagonist" stay put behind his unlocked front door? One hour? One night? One day? One month? How about sleeping? How about working? What will he eat, if he only eats pizza? Won't the cheated husband wait for him outside? Why didn't the cheated husband took any action against his cheating wife and only then go visit not "ours" but "his (the writer's) shitty protagonist"? Too many why(s) and how(s) turn this overused plot into a very bad story...1*

Where the wife is too stupid, too naive or too bored to actually remain faithful to her vows.

The ending redeemed it immensely. The lies, deceit and adultery are revealed and events have spiralled out of anyone's control.

Just another idiot who can not Finnish what he/she started -1*

How many men love to know violence against women and men.

What a thrill that someone gets shot or beat with a bat.That is so hot and sexy..

Not really my cup of tea but interesting. The work place can be a jungle on a daily basis. The chaseR and the chaseE is an on going situation.

I appreciate the effort to make Susan's seduction some feat of strategy and cleverness, but when she started sending pictures of herself naked she pretty much revealed herself as your run of the mill common slut. She had no self respect, she had no sense of marriage commitment, and she wanted to be totally desired for her body, not her mind. Just like your everyday common slut. And how hard is it to seduce a slut? So it was a whole lot of wasted dithering and fake contemplation of a very simple exchange: "Hey, you wanna fuck? No, but I will for you, you smooth talking bastard."

Actually, what was very subtle and delicious, was the very end, where the predator is waiting behind the door with his baseball bat, when he learns that he's about to have his brains splattered about his den of inequity. His prowess as a woman killer is about to be trumped by the prowess of a violently enraged husband, a predator killer. Sweet. I hope the first few shots are not to the head.

Just because it was different.

The husband, described as a mouse, took up arms when cucked, but you left the ending to our imaginations, which was a good writing device. We also get to imagine what happens to Susan. Nice touch.

Left the ending to our imagination? If I wanted to imagine an ending or a story I wouldn't bother reading the fucking story, I'd make up my own. It's puzzling that one would enjoy reading a story without an ending. Really puzzling. Takes all kinds. Authors who don't finish stories get an automatic one star rating. Period.

Truth be told this happens everyday in the workplace .

An unfinished story about another stupid woman who falls for/seduced by a slime-ball's line of BS.

Sluts & slime-balls deserve every consequence for their actions; including a hole between their eyes.

Feeling kind of generous; gave story 2*. Had there actually been an ending, might have rated it better. Stories need beginning, middle & end; missing one makes it incomplete/unfinished.

No innocents to be found among this cast of characters of profoundly dystopian story . I appreciate the author steered away from cheesy, romantic cliches, but there has to be some middle ground or dynamic tipping point to search for. Once the wager was made , the prude's fate was sealed . If this a guitar song , it would composed of all minor chords.

But what do I know ? Radiohead and Nine Inch Nails have forged hall of fame careers with multiple sucessive albums with downhearted tones contained in this story. As a hardcore Steely Dan fan , I might well be too blind to see the author might be a burgeoning variant of Chuck Palahuniak . Time will tell.

It seems that many of your readers lack imagination, judging by their comments. Personally, I don't think your story needs more of an ending as it leaves the reader to imagine his/her own ending. Similar to how the great Hitchcock ended his stories. I thought the seduction was a little easier than expected, given the prudish description of Susan, but the story was quite enjoyable.

1*. It was good until it ended in the middle of the climax

Enjoyed the well-written story in a style unlike the usual seduction piece on here. And loved the O'Henryish. "Lady or the Tiger," ending. Well-done stories don't need a neat tie-up.

Just can not understand why the chicken shits hide behind anonymous. The ones opposed to cuckold stories must be latent homosexuals themselves.

Not a bad story, so finish the story please.

Story sucked

Aside from the bet this story happens very often. Even the most loyal fall . When opportunity presents itself over and over the chance of cheating becomes very great. Starts with emotional cheating, building a relationship and the aggressor using what the other is confiding in them as help to get them naked. I know tons of guys that worked in big office setting with lots of workers and it was constant. One that stands out is a beautiful ( I saw a pic ) woman about 44 very happily married with 4 kids to her high school sweetheart. He was telling us how she always talked so highly of hubby and at out and about town always lovey dovey. At company functions they always held hands and stayed together. As the friend said the hubby was a good guy , very friendly . Well he persued her for years with flirting and compliments that she never fell for until one night at happy hour with all the coworkers killing time until the traffic lightened up . She had two drinks and he gave her another as she was saying how hubby had to work out of town for the weekend. She was so tipsy and was saying how jealous of all the girls who jumped from guy to guy and others that cheated. She felt like no one wanted her and as she joked with my friend who she knew for years he was moving in touching her more and then he kissed her lightly on her lips . Someone passed shots around then people started leaving and he took his chance . No one is home so no rush and he took her to a room he had next door . She was drunk and he was aggressive and her fucked her every which way . He piped a viagra which he always carries just in case and for four hours on and off used every hole in many positions and was rough and verbal. He took her ass , her first with them facing the mirror as he dirty talked and he came a little in and then put in her mouth . . He face slapped her with his dick a lot , came in her face once had her rim his ass a few times. When the drinks wore off guilt settled in. He calmed her and was fucking her for a couple of years until he got engaged. He alway said how hard it was to catch a game with hubby or golf thinking how he fucks his wife and they truly look like the perfect couple. Even when they cou fuck he would at least twice a week have her blow him and swallow. Even one time at her daughters wedding he got her to blow him while he fingered her pussy then made her go find hubby and kiss him before she had a drink. He admits how fucked up that was but he was drunk and found it so hot.

3*

That shit isnt erotic or exciting!!

our protagonist, our protagonist, our protagonist, our protagonist, our protagonist ..............

a protagonist. Dumb fucker.

It was a good and interesting (different) story.

I was a little annoyed by the use of "The Protagonist" but the story was clever including the ending. The story slammed to a halt and left me wanting more but that is good. Now I want to see him take Darren's willing wife in an epilog. Or better yet somehow end up off the market with Susan....

Ignore the anon's comments that are not constructive.

Its bad on more than one level. First the "protagonist" is less than a friend knowing full well what could happen to Darren's and Susan's marriage. A true friend doesn't do something to a friend, regardless how big an idiot Darren is. Protagonist is fully responsible for the breakup.

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Second, Darren is an idiot for even suggesting the bet. With enough time, a lot of people can be corrupted. Little by little. Like roots cracking concrete.

Third, Darren could have paid his wife more compliments, been much more attentive and made he feel special. What he should have been doing all along anyway. With his blatant egotism and not treating his wife as special, he probably contributed more to protagonist's success than he knew.

Unfortunately, all three lives are in the dumper because of the two male idiots contributing to the demise of the marriage. More Darren's fault than either Susan's or protagonist's fault..

Sequal

is an interesting story. I liked it. Well written, realistic and depressing. Susan's husband was a victim here.

anon.1

Nuff said!

I give a story I read at least four stars. Why, because if it isn't worth at least four stars I won't finish reading it. That doesn't mean I won't start reading a story that has under four stars because some of them are underscored in my opinion. This story held my interest and I think the abrupt ending was the author's way of saying that there are consequences for your actions.

You should name the character. Wtf, is this. Our protagonist were written 36 times

...of my random sample(5) by this author. Any story list with so few "4+'s" is usually a waste of time. Bye

half a story half a score

@lujon2019

half a story half a score

from a half a man

Some many cheating whores and assholes in this author’s stories.

Very well written. A masters of erotic fiction. 5 stars.

I liked it. The reference to the gun in a locked drawer is a dead give away to what is going to happen, but I am a sucker for a story where guys who mess with other men's women get theirs'. Bullet to the dick anyone?

Need to be finished

Give the main character a name, “our protagonist “ takes away from the story.