All Comments on 'The War Effort'

this happened to except it was he who went to war and his whore of a wife and cunt of a brother tried to hide it anyway needless to say my uncle got rid of the worthless twosome as did the rest of the family, he is now married to a normal person and the gruesome twosome lasted about a mouth with each other and nobody ever bothered with them again. Maybe you know them because they are as sick as you fucking are.

Haha yeah this might have been plausible in WW2!?!?

older brother is a soldier and is still a virgin?????? bullshit and shenanigans!!!!!!! he only wanted to fuck lil bro's wife!!!!!!!!!!!! 1* for being completely moronic

Well, realistic in that 'deflowering' is often a 'less than idyllic' event. Too many unfamiliar details with no patterns established, awkward talk...and even more so in the circumstances described. Not very erotic...not quite anti-erotic, but also a bit satisfying because THAT item has been checked off of Billy's 'to-do' list!

Semper Fi! (pun fully intended!)

4*

unsatisfying. Use your obvious talent on more believable plots. ****

I would never ever think of doing this, stupid man.

I liked it. It did seem awkward and stilted but I think that suited the subject matter, nice writing. 4*

Retarded

1*

My virgin brother screw my wife? No way. If I was in this tale I would taken him right out for his first session. With a hooker on the street. I pay double for an extra good time. I wouldn't whore out my wife for no one. Luckily in fiction anything is possible.

Most importantly, you get inside the feelings and thoughts of all three and the wife in particular. You skewer a particular situation in a way that makes it fresh and original. As a consequence, highly erotic. Great build up and nicely ambivalent ending.

If you have studied the stories and comments in 'Loving Wives', you will be aware that the wife straying is an excrutiatingly uncomfortable topic for many readers. I hope you will not be upset by some of the comments - particularly from that most prolific of writers 'Anonymous'.

I very much look forward to reading your future stories.

"Don't twist things around Ray. This has absolutely nothing to do with what I want.

Ummmmm, bullshit.

Older brother, a soldier in his mid twenties, and he didn't get some already? I second the call for bullshit and shenanigans, here. He just wanted to fuck his brother's wife. Hubby is a dumbass fucktard for letting him.

2 Stars,

Good job. Enjoyed the read.

I inadvertently posted the same story twice. The internal conflicts the three characters experience intrigues me and while playing around with different titles (The Three Buddies) and minor changes, I made a mistake and posted both stories.

Sorry!

For the read.