All Comments on 'The Webcam Model's Secret'

While the story was pretty good, a guy doing himself with a dildo for his girlfriend hardly qualifies as a gay male story. Also your grammar is atrocious and your sentence structure needs serious work as well.

I agree with the previous poster who made mention of the overall grammar structure needing improvement; for future stories, you will want to engage the services of an editor. Consider this constructive criticism...

great writning and it could use more detail and much much longer, keep your readings waiting and wanting more. I did love it tho.