All Comments on 'The Wedding Date'

Good story need a follow up to this!

The ending was surprising; quite abrupt. You really gave us no reason for David to have a change of heart and a desire for a serious relationship. That would take more time than was allowed for in the story. His behavior was, as described, about on par with his past performances, so a reader could doubt he had changed. Simon is not a nice guy, moving in on his brother's GF the way he did. My radar says avoid this toxic family in spite of their money. Then there are some editing bloopers but you are obviously a competent scribbler. Your female POV is quite authentic, too. This is a story that could easily grow legs. Hope to read more from you.

... of Anna's and David's story. Don't let it end here. There is more I'm sure.

Thank you, Fanny

Good content but you could use a better editor. I could help if you want?

thanks for the story. I enjoyed it.

"Pearly red wine" hmmm. How about the standard ruby red wine. I appreciate avoiding common cliches, but the new phrase shouldn't be counter intuitive.

Thanks for your comments! I re-edited the story and have submitted an improved version, it should come online shortly.

I'm not an english speaker myself, so if you spot any remaining error please let me know.

Maybe there will be a sequel, but my first priority is to get another story out.

I loved reading it. However, I felt the ending was, sort of, rushed. I would really love to see you write a second chapter of this wonderful piece. Please give it a shot. Best of Luck!

Regards,

IW.

Why does Anna refer to adult men as boys? That's really strange.

Drake, same way women get referred to as "girls".

What's really strange about the story is we don't know if her final date in the story is David. If it is the story wraps up fairly nicely but if it isn't then why did we read that really long story up to those last three paragraph?

This feels really incomplete. Disappointed at a total lack of ending. 3*