by blaster666
A nice story.
Just one tiny nit-pick. On page 1 Is "mature eloquence". I think blaster meant "mature elegance".
Good story. Shoot, I'd love to be in Bradley's shoes. I know you said it is a work of fiction, but I hope there was something, or someone in your life that spurred this story.
Its so refreshing to read something this good on LitE. So many of the stories are very poorly written. This one is great. It doesn't hurt that the subject matter is near to my heart either. Real people, real emotions, real needs. Thank you blaster. A follow-up story or two would be great. Keep up the good work!
This is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site !!!! You certainly laid out the scene very well, brought the story along and then reached an intimacy between them that was fantastic............. the sexual events shared between them was done so well; arousing, hot, wanting and brought out all the right details at the right time. It made the reader feel they were there and felt the sexual energy ! Thank you.
Now we need more chapters to detail how their adventure starts and how they share their new found life together !! Of course, the sex only gets better and more daring !!
Anon: Yes I did mean to say elegance. Thank you for pointing that out. I will try to do a better job of proof-reading, and my apologies for any mistakes.
This was an excellent story, very sensuous and sex positive. And the chemistry between Bradley and Abby was very natural. The only negatives were little inconsistencies, such as 'eloquence' being used when 'elegance' was intended, and how Abby eyes change from green at the start of the story, to brown at the end. However, these small flaws don't detract from the quality of your writing, and can be corrected in the future with more rigorous proofreading. I look forward to reading more stories from you :)
Would like to see you continue this story.
A fantastic story. Well written. Very erotic, but in a subtle, intimate way. The story and characters seemed very 'real.' I look forward to more stories as Abby and Bradley get to know one another, as they travel around the country in their motor home.
thank you! I hope you continue with the story wit more chapters soon.
I got a very real sense of your characters.
Good job.
Your pacing for this story was perfect. Built up the characters enough to get a solid sense of who they are. Your content flowed from scene to scene. Excellent job!
This was a loving as were all the others with excellent love scenes and Hot sex . Your efforts are another 5*****s ad usual .
Having read all your stories I am waiting with baited breath for the next installments they are all very good .
Thanks again for sharing
TX Cracker
You are very good story teller.. Thanks for sharing.
The title says it all...You need to do a Chapter 2 on this story...tre' excellente!!!
One of the best written and developed stories yet on this site. There's something wrong with anyone who didn't like this. Thank you for the great story.
The old fart
Please give us more of this sweet story. Sex on a beach in the morning; campsite neighbors noticing the rocking RV; anal exploration; sex in the middle of a field in the plains.
I'm torn between wanting more of this story and worry that more would ruin the sweet ending... Excellent story as always!
Way to go Blaster!! A great tale with an ending. Thank you.
Great story about two people that find each other and find the love they are missing. The sex was just so special, not the beyond belief sex that gets written a lot of times. Thanks for a great love story.
Thanks so very much. I love older women younger men romances, I had 2 in my life and they were unbelievably satisfying. Kudos
Lovely story, I gave it four stars because it was just a bit short for me.
Very much to my ultimate pleasure. Just the right forward movement to accomplish the ultimate conclusion. Some fantasy for me involved. But totally enjoyable. 5 stars from me!!
Enjoyed the progressive tempo of the story. The loving was straight forward and the intimacy was just beautiful. I read so that I can dream of such satisfying sexual experiences.