All Comments on 'The Wilderness'

More of the same from this author. Better physical descriptions of the boys, Spencer and Randy. 'He (Spencer) was a handsome guy about 6' with broad smooth shoulders, plump pecs and tight looking biceps, defined abs and a perky bubble butt on his muscular body decorated with a line of black hair up his stomach which gloriously bloomed into a layer of beautiful chest hair.' The sex scene could use more foreplay. And one again, I desire some emotion.

chesthairslave has given you some very good advice. You have definite writing talent but, for the readers of this website, you need to emphasize the erotica part of Liter-otica. Extended foreplay and warmer description of the lover's sexual dalliances will get you more votes--although you did get my 5

awesome story i wish it was me

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Very hot