by imp_ian
Don't pay any attention to all the bad comments as there are some good people in this world and I don't see those who commented writing a story in here - you have to start and this is as good as any and it was an okay story for your first. To those who didn't like it know better than to read next time -- but they will just to knock your work. Keep trying and you will get better and don't let others get you down - you know you are better than them. Good luck in the future. *JAG
Don't pay any attention to all the bad comments as there are some good people in this world and I don't see those who commented writing a story in here - you have to start and this is as good as any and it was an okay story for your first. To those who didn't like it know better than to read next time -- but they will just to knock your work. Keep trying and you will get better and don't let others get you down - you know you are better than them. Good luck in the future. *JAG
Forget those who are hung up on the category! Keep them coming. Great first start.
The Idea is ok but the story progresses too fast. With a developpement like first she only jerks him off etc would be greater. And the others arer right, until now there is no incest. But keep writing, potenticial is there
(i excuse myself for my english, i'm german)
Well, maybe I fudged a little bit. On the other hand, 100 is a lot closer to fair than the extremely low scores recorded by the first few readers. Stay with it. For a first story here it is pretty darn good. I'll be watching for more from you. And, yes, slow down a little bit. Let the characters and the readers have time to enjoy your story.
Where is the incest? I admit I was somewhat turned on by this story. I do love mature and curvy Indian women. I was hoping to read an incest story and I ended up a little disappointed. I did not find fault in your story or its writing. I just think that if you titled it with the words "incest" there better damn well be incest in the story. For all your idiots who can't take constructive criticism you are either pimply faced teenage boys or 40 something mama's boys who are used to everyone giving you what you want. Well, I have news for you. Just as this forum is a place for comments that examine its strength it is also a place for comments that examine its weaknesses. P.S. I'm looking forward to the next chapter of this story. Did I mention that I love mature Indian women...Yumm!
Great start, I must say. And you must be a very romantic guy.
I understand it is taboo to do an elder woman in your part of the world, but it would have been better had you put it in the MATURE category.
Most have criticised you just because they came to get some mom-son action but ended up with a neighbour. The frustration shows. But as a story, its quite good.
Be more descriptive next time, Mr Romantic.
u just breed her. she cant tell her husband also. so fuck her bareback until she has your child
Love stories about hairy women, pits & pussy. I also love going down on hairy pussy after I or other men have planted their seed.
A good story and I like it
It's good to see the way your work has improved since this.
I agree it should be in Mature. 5* from me.