by Miles63
You did a good job with your first story. There were several typos or misspelling, but not enough to turn off the reader, completely.
there are few things that made me brake the spell of reading a good story. First, a 200year old witch, that hid for a very long time, over sudden pocked around a cell phone and read text msgs? The other one is witches sexy outfit, Victoria's Secret ??? Just doesn't click. Otherwise LOVED IT !!!!!!!
Thanks, in answer to the question about her being over 200 and knowing how to use a cell phone, she explored and learned about the new world before she trapped Debbie, should have mentioned it in the story I suppose, lol!