All Comments on 'The Wolves of Berlin'

What an intense, gripping story. Very well done.

Overall, you had a great plot, but the writing, I felt, was slightly disappointing. It was wordy in parts and terse in the others. There are a few moments when it reads pretty cool, but it didn't do the story any justice.

Erotic Horror needs an element of surprise, or at least conflict that puts the reader on edge. Wordiness took the sting out of your attack, while meaningless description in some parts were a pain to read. Your writing style definitely needs work.

Seeing that it's a contest entry, I won't down-vote this submission, but I had to leave a comment.

Taking out the frustration, you know. ;)

I thought it was terrific. And it is really an adventure/thriller/horror short story, not a simple "erotic" horror story. Congrats!!! You can write. You should start looking for more professional venues than literotica.