by gspanker051
You could of done so much more. Start another chapter and give it more detail.
Me a likey this one story. Not to much just a lot of bit. Is good this part she branding to him the nut sack. Ha ha! He is very hurts. I like. It. Why they man and woman have ranchs with cattles and not doggles? I no understanding too much good but my inglesh very very good today. Maybe next story woman make poop on man ranch? Ha ha! This very good and. Funy! Okay. So long and I seeing you tomorrow after make poop. Bye. Okay.
Not a female domination story at all, this is a desperate effort to pretend to be a writer. The verbiage is so dumb that it hurts the brain to read it. e.g. She's going to brand his ass & nutsack & he is excited? You're the nutcase.
Bad grammar. Bad punctuation. No drama. Completely unrealistic.