by vorcla
Nicely done. :) I really wasn't sure where it was going, and got a kick out of the twist. Love a little Halloween humor. :)
I didn't get past the first sentence. I'd seen it used so many other times in so many other stories and books that I instantly lost interest in the rest of yours. Sorry!
The story was interesting with a fun twist, but lacked detail. Seemed a bit rushed at times. There wasn't much descriptiveness during any of the intimate scenes. Yours should try to expand upon certain sub-scenes