All Comments on 'The Yellow Rose'

This had potential, but come on, if you want to be a writer, learn to use a grammar and spell check. Better yet, have someone read it over before you submit.

he T/they she He - come on, this is ridiculous. Since when you write pronouns starting with capital letter?

Quit this nonsense.

appropriate to help this story. Long sentences wow.

However, I have seen the Doubled letter one capped used extensively in BDSM stories. I personally don't like it but it is a recognized usage, not a poor author.

i think the story is very touching. i understand the pronoun usage in stories such as this are to show a sign of respect and illustrate the roles for the readers...some like it, others don't but the fact remains the story is heartfelt and i feel well written.

Good job and keep writing!!!!

you need some help. All those words and only eight sentences. The suggestion that you need an editor is valid. The use of the upper/lower case is annoying. If he requires that then so be it but it detracts. Perhaps for published stories he could have you use correct spelling instead of that in deference not to you, but to the people who read it. Good story, well paced. Get an editor please. - MJL

you need some help. All those words and only eight sentences. The suggestion that you need an editor is valid. The use of the upper/lower case is annoying. If he requires that then so be it but it detracts. Perhaps for published stories he could have you use correct spelling instead of that in deference not to you, but to the people who read it. Good story, well paced. Get an editor please. - MJL