All Comments on 'This Deserted Warehouse Place'

I like that you took a chance and wrote in present tense. It was a dark piece but I enjoyed it. Redemption is good.

I like your writing style, You opening is attention catching, though the paragraph structure could use some work. Don't break into new paragraphs so often, it distracts the reader from what your trying to convey. I won't comment on the actual content as the non-consent catergory is not my thing.

Just read this twice and it blows me away. Would like to know more about Sarah Jessica Howard as I really got with her during your story.

I am not sure about the content of this story it was just not any where near wat I thought it would be to be good.