All Comments on 'Three To Get Off Of Despair'
by fermpera
- 10 Comments
Anonymousabout 11 years agoIt's long story but it is worth. Many married couples go through similar experiences and end in divorce and despair. Well written and wery believable. A little more sex action would have been nice. The pool part was very erotic, Well written. keep the good work. Thanyou.
Huedogg2about 11 years agothe only thing you're were right about is that many couples go through a divorce, Incest, swinging and the rest happens in your life not everyone elses.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoreading after page 5, falling asleep. from their on quick reading and slowing when something happened besides fucking. I guess on a other side they would have ended with a dog, always loyal, friendly.......and loving.
so using all forms of sex and be not happy just shows this story is endlessly long, boring and brings nobody anything. and a lot is almost impossible to happen.
pretty sad actually they have nothing in their life, no real comittments, not to each other not to work not to friends as they have none (even the threesome friends never showed up) not to other family , no problems . they only thing is sex, sorry sex with feelings :-).
shaman43about 11 years agoTopic matter was OK but man it was hard to read. It is almost as though the author has English as a second language. There are so many errors in the use of prepositions it sometimes did not make sense. Use of "on" for "in" for example. The syntax was abysmal. Switching the usual placement of words for object and adjectives makes the reading jolting. Use of nouns as verbs too frequently. The dialogue was frequently stilted and old fashioned. It seemed the author wanted to sound more elitist than readable with some of the vocabulary.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoOverall an enjoyable story. Since your location is South America I will assume English is not your first language and it shows. There were many errors, wrong words, missing words, missing letters in words, and spelling and grammar issues. I suggest you consider using an editor to help clean up your stories. Having said that, I appreciate your efforts and look forward to more stories from you.
Rancher46almost 3 years agoThe first 6 pages, well it was nothing but a swinging and a fuckfest. The last 6 pages was a delight to read and resulted in a loving polyamory relationship. I could have skipped the first 6 pages, missed nothing and enjoyed the whole story much more.
