by Ranefox
I enjoyed it. Nice job of conveying the emotions involved. Bummer it ended on a sour note but not all stories are meant to have happy endings.
Excellent story. I thought you really captured the emotions that churn beneath the surface of most relationships. There is so much we want, so much we expect, from SOMEONE ELSE - oh, what a heavy load of responsibility to lay on someone. Especially when we can already see their pain.
I enjoyed it - starters to dessert. This should be your day job!
sex should never end on a down note, and neither should sex stories...also needed more description...
That hurt. No, you shouldn't give up your day job, but don't give up writing either. And if this story is auto-biographical, kick that bitch Laurie to the curb.