by dylanmurphy
Much nicer, Dylan. This goes beyond the simple mechanics and begins to pick up steam--er, steamy emotion.
A suggestion? Edit the last paragraph so it reaads, "Caterina and I never found our nameless benefactor again. But there were others. Quiet evenings and good books were left far behind."
The level of non-consensual play and violence was off-putting. That is not how you treat women that you just met.