All Comments on 'Thunder Threatens Ch. 01'

You ruined the story with his "peeping" while she was passed out. Typical. Get to the seduction instead of stupid fantasies.

A good first chapter, quite the reverse to what 'Anon' thinks. I like the way you are slowly building up the tension between them, it is far more realistic and makes for a much better story. Looking forward to the next episode.

Have to agree with anon, wasted oppurtunity as he's leaving the next day. Instead of wasting time with pictures you should have taken it upstairs as your title suggested maybe even added a 3rd page