All Comments on 'Tiana's Toy'

That looks promising... Hope it will continue...soon... Thanks for sharint!

If this is your first story I can only wait in eager anticipation of what you will write next!

Very well done -- five stars, thanks and hugs.

1st paragraph:

"Beakers, test tubes, and a single large transparent tank bubbled with various colorful liquids, that looked like they might explode at any moment."

The comma between 'liquids' and 'that might explode' is unnecessary, it's the liquids themselves that might explode, so there shouldn't be a clause break there.

Other than that, a very interesting beginning, I'm interested to see where you're going with this.

I love stories like this! Keep writing

Oh, I so want to read what happens next! Please, more devices like that, and don't skip on the action. 5*

Incredibly good story! I love such elaborate bdsm-machines. My only critique: Much much to short. Please continue.

That's a well done introduction. The only problem with it was that it cut off just as things had gotten really good! I dearly hope there is a chapter 2 coming.

But please continue so I can possibly finish what I started.

Very well written, thanks.