All Comments on 'Tick Tock Ch. 02'

Trusting there will be a continuation of Mrs. Moore's seduction............

A nice, well-told and very hot story - thank you - 5 *s. I can hardly wait for Chapter 3.

make up ur damm mind this shitty ass writing gets 1 star from me do this shit over

Cant wait for the followup to it....

Love this like the other person I can't wait for the next installment

Having read both chapters this is a very erotic and interesting story. I would prefer longer chapters, but then it does leave the reader wanting more, how an 18 year old lad could walk away from his dream woman when she is right there and gagging for it I don't know, but I am interested to see where it all leads.

However the spelling and grammar are appalling, there is no need for this and it can be so annoying that it detracts from what is a good story. You really do need to proof read or have someone do it for you, don't you realise that, as someone has already said, at the start the main character was called Andy, and then Mervin, and then Melvin!!! There really is no excuse for such poor attention to detail. If you want people to read and enjoy your stories then you need to sort out these schoolboy errors.

The first and second parts should have been one and you have have finished the scene. I feel like I got to the sex or of porn movie and then it stops. Let the reader cum with your story. Also an 18 year still in high school would have fucked her on the spot.

I must know what Merv the perv does next

Definitely write More.......

you really must write more. It was really was so great