All Comments on 'Tinker's Office Fuck'

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KY XtianKY Xtianalmost 13 years ago
Good effort, needs work.

Good enough for a quick wank, but as a story it needs a lot of work. The spelling, punctuation and grammar all need a good editor. Also, there are a few inconsistent parts, such as when Max is face-to-face with her pussy and is fingering her, but then is later shocked to find that her pussy is wet when he puts his fingers into her again.

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