All Comments on 'Tiny Tina's Trials Pt. 02'

I see you save enough money from flipping burgers to get s computer. I forced my way though both these pieces of trash just to see how bad you could mangle an alleged story. Take some advice, go find that rock you crawled out from under and get back under it. It's, and I use this word very loosely, it's people like you that spread hatred, divisiveness and division. Author???? I think not. Pound out what your pea-sized brain comes up with, submit and Lit lets it slide. You have no imagination, no writing skills what-so-ever. Do us all a huge favor and put down your pen and paper, you do know what those are, Right, leave and never darken this site again. I usually try to leave constructive criticism. My thoughts are my own. My opinion of you is this: you are lower than whale dung. Horrid, absolutely the worst thing I've read in any genre. It was RAPE pure and simple and if you advocate that you need psychiatric evaluation. I hear you can get that for free in some mental health facility, but then my hard eared tax dollars would have to pay for it. You are trash xxchillxx. Why not just have her become a crack whore??? Oh, shoot, just wrote your next chapter dumb-ass. Some may like this shit. Some may even revel it. Dudette, get a life, Seriously. Not even going to let you know who I am. Once again, GO THE FUCK AWAY!!!!

Signed More than you'll ever be.

You stupid fucking animal. So, Blacks are dumb, cant speak proper English and can only score with White Bitches by raping them. Idiot, asshole, piece of shit. Fuck you stupid White Cracka, inferior worthless animals, leave US the fuck alone. And never open your mouth again except to suck ass and swallow

I won’t to know more I love a strong black man fucking a white pussy ? Keep writing! Negative comments are by small dicked insecure men

When are you putting out part three?

I read both chapters...and honestly chapter 1 wasn't to bad. But chapter 2? This was rape, abuse, trespassing, assault, and primarily racism...every bad thing rolled into one. I know plenty of well spoken and educated black men and women. And if this is insinuated that he's poor spoken just because he's black or because he's a jock is totally bigoted. Taking this story in this direction wasn't a very good idea from any point of view you look at it from...that is unless you happen to be the type of person who enjoys that kind of abuse, both to inflict and/or receive. I can't imagine what possessed you to write this story in this way, but ultimately it makes you look bad. Even if it was out of personal ideas or outside recommendations. Honestly, unless there's some way to alter this story in chapter 3, I don't see a reason to write a continuation. She's totally submited to being abused and treated like a possession and has essentially abandoned her family for it. Which also implies abandoning her education and friends. Not a good second part.

... pulled out his AR-15 rifle, ran to the front door as Tyrone reached for the doorknob, and screamed “FREEZE, YA BLACK FUCKIN’ NIGGA!” And you know Marty is not anything but brave as proven when he attacked Tyrone before. Now, with the power his assault-type rfle gave him, he was even braver.

Tyrone turned towards Marty, “What the fuck?!!! You fuckin’ cracka! Shiii... you don’ have the ba...” “BOOM-BOOM” a double tap through Tyrone’s chest and throat. In reflex Tyrone, the real coward he was was pulling Tina infront of himself as he was shouting at Marty. Tina, being the stupid cunt she was was throwing herself infront of Tyrone. So the second shot, that tore out Tyrone’s throat, first passed through Tina’s forehead. At that distance the steel core NATO 5.56 round wasn’t even deflected going through the two thin flat pieces of bone of Tina’s skull. The velocity of the bullet was slowed enough that it did starte tumbling. Later, it was shown Tina’s the hole in Tina’s forehead was #2 pencil small, as big round as a golfball going out (and at this juncture going through 2 thin pieces of bone, and 5lbs of brain) started to yaw. In the space between the back of Tina’s head and Tyrone’s neck the bullet tumbled 45°. The entry hole in Tyrones throat was golfball sized too, but the exit wound, bullet and bone shattering as it clip a vertebrate, pretty much tore the whole back of the neck to hamburger. Tyrone was walking dead when the first bullt nicked his aorta. He was dead within seconds when his neck and throat was pretty much torn out. And poor stupid, weakminded silly Tina, was instantly dead when her brain was turned to a fatty slurry as the hydrostatic shock of the bullets passage tore through her brain.

“Oh God! No! Tina! Tina!” screamed Marty. And collapsed on top of the two dead and bloody bodies.

Of course the police arrested Marty. The DA charged him with murder. The NRA (Marty having paid for gun owners insurance through his liffetime membership with the NRA) hired the best gun rights attornies in the country. After a lengthy 6 month nvestigation and court fight, Marty was not convicted due to a hung jury. The NRA lawyers pointed out Marty’s injuries from Tyrone, his fesr for his own life and that of his step-daughters, who was obviously being kidnapped (how was she to say otherwise). Tyrone was even so cowsrdly as to use Tina as a human shield.

Marty missed going to jail, but even with his NRA insurance, he was bankrupt with other lawyer fees. His wife Judy, Tina’s natural mother, left Marty too distraught over the loss of her daughter, taking half of the remaining monies with her. Marty lost his house, lost his marriage, lost his job, lost his daughter all because he couldnt get Tina to wear decent conservative clothes going to school. Like Tina said, “What a dork.”

Sad weak shit

to all those getting so upset.

this is an erotic FICTION sight!!

Seriously In which world woud a decently raised girl fall in love so quickly with a guy with such trash mouth? Uggghhh. I coudnt even read the language that character used.