All Comments on 'TJ Ch. 05'

jt I am hooked. Favorite line' "My brother's knees were like Jell-O." LAUGH OUT LOUD

You've made me sad, death. You've made me feel desperate, new school senior year. You've made me laugh. You've made me feel. Great story ...

I am so sucked into this story. The love and support, amazing. Not like this 39 years ago.

Loving the way you have built up the personalities etc. last chapter did feel a little rushed but still great!

Please continue with the storyline. It has the legs to go far!

Thank you!

I think you're rushing to end this story. Its needs a little more development and less chunks of speech at times. I also think that TJ's character needs a little more developing, he seems to get angry way too quickly. Take more time to write the chapters rather than churning out half developed stories like a machine.