All Comments on 'To Love a Were Ch. 01'

A new story.... great beginning. Can't wait until next chapter

im curious now-- would love to know whats going on b/t eian & the little vampire girl... can already tell there's going to be drama involving Amber & i really like Dominic & Sydney's angle. cant wait to read more :)

a good story but it jumped around too much. We were introduced to a lot of characters very quickly and we were given a lot of storyline in very few pages. Also I don't feel any connection to any of the characters at all. I don't feel like I know them and I don't relate to them in any way so I can't like them or care about what happens to them. Keep working on it.

great start to what could be an amazing story...

but a vampire child who can read minds? really. a little twlight storyline dontcha think?

I'm reading you for the first time and find I very much enjoyed this first chapter. You have created alot of characters to peak my interest. Since chapter 2 has posted I'm moving on, can't wait to see what happens next!

I am interested in the plot. However, there are many awkward phrases and unnatural sentences, as if a non-native speaker were writing this. The story doesn't flow well, so I felt a bit lost while reading it. It's not enjoyable to read in its current, unpolished form. Can you find someone to beta-read/edit your work for you?

you have made reference to the "canine" side of the werewolf but that would be the wrong genus genis? it would have to be the lupine side of a werewolf wolfs aren't canines but lupine

Honestly, I thought it was a good story but i don't get what it was supposed to be about.

Always love all of your storys and this seems to be goung the same way loved it and cant wait to hear MORE!

Jorjiah xxx

I'm guessing Mr. Dominic MacFarlane will get his comeuppance in the later chapters, but so far his macho assholery is very, very effective.

Please go die in a fire, Dominic.... ^^

But you know that what will happen is clichéd too.

So Werewolves are good and vamps are bad. What is going to happen with that little girl? I`m completely hooked