All Comments on 'Toy'

...but a couple of niggles:

Where's the captivating plot - a little twist here or there would turn this into really good writing.

Secondly I am always slightly sceptical of commands to come, but that's just me. I suppose, if they are to have any reality, the toy in question needs a considerable amount of training as well as instinct. This could even make a story in itself. Perhaps you might look to more build up into the psychology of the situation, as well as the sheer physicality of the relationship that you do so well in this story.

Well done on a readable tale and good luck with your future writing.

loved it