by tis_mina
I wish for you to write more on this story... i love reading this story...
I love the world you've created here. You write so beautifully.
THE BEGINNING OF AN ENJOYABLE STORY MADE LESS SO BY NUMEROUS MISTAKES: WORD USAGE, SPELLING, FAILURE TO FORM COMPLETE SENTENCES, AND OTHER UNNECESSARY OMISSIONS. A GOOD EDITOR WOULD LIKELY HELP IMMEASURABLY IN RAISING THE OVERALL QUALITY OF THIS PROMISING STORY.