All Comments on 'Transgender Games Ch. 01'

If this truly is your first work you have made an exceptional job of it.

The descriptions are complex and enlightening, and the smattering of humor makes the whole journey that much more enjoyable.

If the author can stand a little constructive criticism, I felt that some of the blocks of text were rather too long. I felt in places, for readability, it would benefit from breaking into smaller paragraphs, but on the whole this is an engrossing story, being exceptionally well told.

Also, I was confused by the Transgender in the title, yet nothing about that in the story, but I presume that will become clear, so I eagerly await the next chapter.

Some people do go on don't they (anon)

But I do take the point. This is very well written, almost too well for here.

But I to was was left wondering what the "transgender" in the title meant. We'll have to wait and see I guess.

Yes, I'm a wordy guy, and I can take it too far. I will definitely focus on brevity going forward!

Your compliments are very much appreciated, Anon, FurryFace, and as to "Where are the transgenders?", they'll play a much bigger part in Janice's story soon!

You have a gift for writing. I LOVE the build up as well. Your descriptions of the women are tantalizing and intriguing. If I was to provide a few thoughts I would echo the "where is the transgender?" question. You could have put in a foreshadow to it in part 1 and that would be helpful.

Also, the main character moving from slut with bald headed boss to aggressively trying to insert herself into a lesbian foursome was a bit of a whiplash and stretched believe-ability. I wanted to go there, but had a tough time. Perhaps if it had been shifted to the bubbly blonde's initiation into the club was to seduce another woman publicly...that would have worked. Anyways, 5 stars and keep going! The first story is the most difficult, PLEASE don't stop!