All Comments on 'Traveling to Tucson Ch. 01'

stops writing clever, funny, amusing, and HOT stories. Love them!!!!Love this one.

The author can easily improve how readily the story can be read by removing all the "..." use. Its not a pause that's the job of a coma(,) in good writing, and far too many sentences/paragraphs are being ended with the use of ths item.

I liked the story in theory. But Silky is as dumb as a door nail, yet she uses such big words. If this story does become a series I will probably follow it. It just needs a few tweaks to be a really good story.

only read the first few paragraphs not my cup of tea as the britts say. this should have been in the bdsm area with all the whipping.

I don't like BSMD either, and almost stopped reading. I'm glad I didn't. Very good story even if somewhat silly plot line and dialog. The only REAL issue is that the author begins writing in "Valley Girl"... "...never gone alone before, so I was 'LIKE' scared." Thank goodness that ended quickly.

I really liked your story...ok a bit far fetched (maybe) but great, well written and done with and for fun,,,,keep it up plz ( i mean the writing)

Jimsim