All Comments on 'Trinity Finishing School Ch. 01'

This would have been a five-star story of it hadn't ended the way it did. I first assumed it was missing a page. The story would have been better served to carry it through the discipline scene. When submitting a story in chapters, you need to give the reader an experience, not build the tension and then bail. Also, don't use parentheses in dialogue.

Gave this a 5 because im expecting more

The level of detail on the finishing school is impressive. May I apply as a teacher?